Mike O’Brien @zoomburst.substack.com · Jan 30 I've just read through all the #PoemsAbout #BlackVeils that have gone up so far. I have to say that the quality is stratospheric this week. My breath is taken away. I'd better throw my veil into the ring...
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I wonder why we both thought our poems in iambic tetrameter? Maybe the word 'veil' has archaic overtones?
Yes, everyone brings their A game to PoemsAbout, including yourself. This narrative has both fragility and strength. It is quite beautiful.
Your internal rhythm (eight syllables) gives this a drive that carries it through to the unknowing end Mike. A sober reading from you this time.
Lovely piece Mike ❤️
Cold as he was… This is a beautiful poem Mike! 👏👏
Yep. Good one. I always see a gentle death as female and you catch that really well .
So lovely, and a hopeful take on the prompt - a kindly death. I really like the mythological feel to it too. 💫
A gentle farewell 👏🏻
I've just started reading with yours--add it to the stratosphere. There's such a feeling of quiet comfort here. I hope death is like that.
Wonderful
Love the balance of tragic and magic, Mike. 👏