John Chmura · Mar 6

I love how you put “twice” on its own line. I can hear the inflection on that. Choices like that can really boost a poem’s impact!

Jen Thorne · Mar 6

I always thought santa was creepy. I hated the "sees you when you're sleeping" line! Love this poem though Mike 👏👏👏

Rachel Burrows · Mar 6

Fab! The thought of it is truly terrifying isn’t it! 😂 Great write Mike!

La Reine des Metaphores · Mar 7

Indeed. Thank you.

Sue Ibrahim · Mar 6

What a clever twist!

DrNaturegirl · Mar 7

This is so good, Mike! Very cleverly done. Full marks!

Alex, Poet · Mar 6

urgh. If I could go back in time and tell my teachers "I'll god you in a minute, lass!"

Merril D. Smith · Mar 7

Oh so well done using lines from the song--and terrifying! I agree with John about putting "Twice" on a separate line.

KUNA · Apr 8

I know what you mean about it feeling like an anthology. I loved how some poets explored the tension between visibility and anonymity.

KUNA · Mar 6

that's exactly what I love about this community - the way a prompt can spark a whole collection of thoughts and feelings

Jan Peters - Solivagant Wisdom · Mar 6

The malevolent benevolence of panopticon Santa! 🙏🏆😁

Brenda Blue · Mar 6

ONG! That’s quite the interesting take on the prompt! Love it.

@poetrader.bsky.social · Mar 6

I always thought the song was more threat than Christmas treat.

David Birch · Mar 6

What a clever reworking, Mike, where the sinister replaces the benign and threats replace promise

@paulrapley.bsky.social · Mar 13

Yep. Took a lot of working out, back in the day...